tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post7745079277330412378..comments2023-11-05T05:59:33.041-05:00Comments on Sara McClung: Need Depth? Just Add ConflictSara {Rhapsody and Chaos}http://www.blogger.com/profile/09824996048264979275noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-84548197637342769492010-01-05T01:53:29.925-05:002010-01-05T01:53:29.925-05:00Awesome examples! And you hit the nail right on th...Awesome examples! And you hit the nail right on the head-- you need both internal and external conflict to give a story proper depth!<br /><br />*Clicks "Follow" button*<br /><br />:) Looking forward to more!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07615258719942916382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-88792709948943357072010-01-04T22:59:14.092-05:002010-01-04T22:59:14.092-05:00Nothing like a bit of conflict to get the heart ra...Nothing like a bit of conflict to get the heart rate pumping...<br /><br />Well illustrated Sara :)Just Wendy https://www.blogger.com/profile/05268645629027109282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-79646397093655065122010-01-04T21:48:33.556-05:002010-01-04T21:48:33.556-05:00Nice work...I love these examples--you make it sou...Nice work...I love these examples--you make it sound so easy :) And your comments are highly entertaining!lisa and laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18144863275895761642noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-26538960427265486072010-01-04T21:08:37.923-05:002010-01-04T21:08:37.923-05:00Great point! Internal and external conflict are k...Great point! Internal and external conflict are key. One doesn't fly without the other.Susan R. Millshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09578747592345750650noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-176558806234547092010-01-04T19:20:58.713-05:002010-01-04T19:20:58.713-05:00Great post - conflict is the core of the story. I ...Great post - conflict is the core of the story. I like the way you've laid it out - very clear :)Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-25417162633094760312010-01-04T18:34:31.142-05:002010-01-04T18:34:31.142-05:00Then Iapetus999 and Simon high-five and figure out...Then Iapetus999 and Simon high-five and figure out how to finish the job....mwha ha haha<br /><br />I mean good post'n'stuffAndrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-66368918515100344712010-01-04T17:25:09.994-05:002010-01-04T17:25:09.994-05:00Awesome post Sara. If anyone needed proof that you...Awesome post Sara. If anyone needed proof that you're an awesome CP--this would do it. (But back off, she's mine and my messy draft needs too much of her time right now for me to share her!) :)Shannon Messengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08003607156860716462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-9211958315821499672010-01-04T16:44:22.265-05:002010-01-04T16:44:22.265-05:00Iapetus999-I just choked on a bite of my freaking ...Iapetus999-I just choked on a bite of my freaking cookie when I read your comment. LOL hahahahha<br /><br />Carol, Oh God. HG was so full of conflict and tension... But don't forget, your MS (at least... I'd know this if you'd ever SHARE it with me, lol) is based on a totally different premise!!<br /><br />SIMON. HOLY MOTHER EFFING LAUGHING. Oh. Em. Gee. I'm dying. DYING. You definitely nailed the internal conflict with the fear of sneeze dripped eggs. I seriously just cracked up and practically spit Diet Dr. Pepper on the screen (which I was washing down the cookie I almost spit out from Iapetus999's comment.) <br /><br />Frankie-glad you liked it :-) Thanks!Sara {Rhapsody and Chaos}https://www.blogger.com/profile/09824996048264979275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-63088376020892324242010-01-04T16:38:44.068-05:002010-01-04T16:38:44.068-05:00Southern Princess-Thanks!!
Anne-LOL hooks are ano...Southern Princess-Thanks!!<br /><br />Anne-LOL hooks are another planned part of the series... great minds and all that :-)<br /><br />Shannon-glad you're enjoying the posts!<br /><br />T.Anne, I'm happy you enjoyed the examples! They were the first two things I thought of, and there are TONS of other things I'm sure we could come up with...Sara {Rhapsody and Chaos}https://www.blogger.com/profile/09824996048264979275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-38177211722190659852010-01-04T13:31:34.052-05:002010-01-04T13:31:34.052-05:00Always great-thanks for the post!!!!Always great-thanks for the post!!!!Frankie Diane Mallishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06066659801542129040noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-65210067671308670192010-01-04T13:11:10.088-05:002010-01-04T13:11:10.088-05:00Scenario C - The Blog Comment
1. Simon decides to ...Scenario C - The Blog Comment<br />1. Simon decides to comment on Sara's blog post. <i>Not particularly interesting. He does that fairly often.</i><br />2. But in his comment, he makes derogatory remarks about Sara's writing ability. <i>Now why would he do that? Hm. (Wait. Does that count as an external conflict? Can you even have an external conflict online? I dunno. I think my scenario's breaking down here...)</i><br />3. Sara gets mad and unfollows Simon's blog <i>perfectly understandable</i> but doesn't know that Simon was irritable because the waitress at the diner sneezed on his eggs this morning, and he has this irrational fear of sneezed-upon eggs <i>Huh? Where am I going with this anyway?</i> because of a childhood episode where great aunt Matilda sneezed and her false teeth came out and landed on his scrambled eggs but then Grandma Shinkowicz made him eat the eggs anyway 'cause when she was growing up in Poland they had to eat sneezed-on eggs all the time and if it was good enough for them it would by-God be good enough for little Simon... <i>I think I lost control of that somewhere along the way. Did I even get to inner conflict? Um. Oh, never mind. Please ignore the above scenario.</i><br /><br />But I really did think this was a good post, good lady. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-67502036235140541142010-01-04T12:30:27.324-05:002010-01-04T12:30:27.324-05:00Very nice examples. You know, I was just thinking ...Very nice examples. You know, I was just thinking of this today with regard to my second manuscript. I need more conflict, to make it harder on the MCs. I mean, you read The Hunger Games, and it seems like conflict never ends. Horrible things happen (to such a degree that you wonder how the author could have done that to her poor MCs), but it makes it so much more interesting to read. More importantly, the emotion you have invested in your awesome characters keeps you locked into the book wanting to find out how they'll work their way out of it, ever so hopeful that they'll make it.<br /><br />Great post, chica.Carolina M. Valdez Schneiderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11589934533051907801noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-35925349937573780072010-01-04T12:05:19.649-05:002010-01-04T12:05:19.649-05:00Conflict?? Did you say you wanted conflict?? I don...Conflict?? Did you say you wanted conflict?? I don't think you can handle conflict, little miss Sara <3. Who do you think you are? Only <i>I</i> can handle conflict, because when I was little, my mother would beat me for not having enough conflict in my writing, and now I'm consumed with rage over the littlest bit of conflict! How's that for conflict, huh?!? What do you think about that??<br /><br />There, is that enough internal and external conflict for you? ;) Good post.Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-84362392399505243682010-01-04T11:19:54.012-05:002010-01-04T11:19:54.012-05:00I love your examples. I really need to work on thi...I love your examples. I really need to work on this, thanx.Tanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10518718614911804428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-31247245920706558872010-01-04T10:22:36.203-05:002010-01-04T10:22:36.203-05:00Great lesson, Sara! This is a series that will be...Great lesson, Sara! This is a series that will benefit all of us from PB's to YA's. :-)Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-14143360393918394592010-01-04T10:17:18.173-05:002010-01-04T10:17:18.173-05:00Very nice! I am loving this series. Conflict is de...Very nice! I am loving this series. Conflict is definitely necessary to get the reader hooked. Thanks for posting!Anne Rileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15142671531881407934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8662203671583091505.post-64609576854065306002010-01-04T10:10:58.746-05:002010-01-04T10:10:58.746-05:00Voila! Love it! I have to catch myself every now &...Voila! Love it! I have to catch myself every now & then when I really need depth and then sometimes when I go overboard! lol this is a great post & wonderful thing to remember!<br />Thanks Sara!<br /><br />http://princesscourtneysbarr.blogspot.comCourtney Barr - The Southern Princesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14455508477182984039noreply@blogger.com